Poetry: “Dare”

used to get the push from them
the childhood need to ask for dares
but now i’m grown and past those things
and now i see no need to care

human interaction
is necessity, not sought
“hell is other people”
who refuse to be caught

people watching is what they say
but it’s more to that
and more to the way
they frown after leaving

maybe i’m not past it yet
maybe they need communication to reflect
or maybe my truth or dare
is a dare to connect


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Poetry: “The Bed Cradles”

the bed cradles
the head of those
who work hard

the mind wanders
from the work of those
who try in life

the work pesters
the feet of those
who walk the path

the feet ache
beneath the gaze of those
who know their direction

the gaze holds
in the head of those
who stay true to their convictions


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Poetry: “From the Cave to Eyes”

There was a cave once long ago
that sat outside a world of eyes
and when the people came to go
the eyes would watch and give them lies.

A cave-dweller came and saw
the fame she made from sunlight’s crown
the eyes came and gave her love
but then their number pushed her down.

After, few people of the cave came out
to seek the creeping death of fame.
Though it mimics love and gives a rush
it’s a death still, bound to flame.

A normal person can’t contain
the weight of a thousand watching eyes
like Atlas holding too much land
they push a person to their demise.


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Poetry: “The End of Summer”

Fire painted trees, cold air pushes to
the light of night shares speckled sights
as fading green comes through.
Goodbye messages they send.

Brown bark bears the cool winds’ blow
twilight stars awake from lakes
of red and blue on sunset’s glow.
Last color before the trend.

Toys are scattered in the yard
the bike chains rust and gather dust
once bright branches lay cut and charred
now firewood for summer’s end.


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Poetry: “Kaizen”

Constant change and constant tests,
the world demands you stop and rest.

Work all day until you tire!
These dizzy thoughts dance until they end
with closed eyes.
Dreams keep my heart on fire
while lone laughter is my only friend.

Don’t contribute anything!
“Only consume and nothing more”
and other lies.
Corpses line the street of nothing
dead with nothing left to show for.

Just take a break and don’t try!
You feel the work in your bones
from all the tries.
But practice makes it perfect
and planes need to work to make them fly.

Even when too tired to move,
continue to improve.


“Kaizen” is a Japanese word used in business as “constant improvement”. I wrote this poem inspired by the fact that I feel incredibly lazy all the time while also feeling the push to better myself.

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Personal Update – Smoke and Spiders – February 25th, 2021

February is ending and the next month begins soon. I’ve been through a lot this month, mostly at my day job. That said, I’ve shopped around a few short stories but nothing major. I still have two novels in the works that I’m planning to finish by Summer, but we’ll see how that goes. Oh you want a pitch? Let me oblige you…

Upcoming Work:

  • “Shadow of the Machine Gods” – Scifi/Fantasy – FAR IN THE FUTURE technology is indistinguishable from magic. The gods, machine rulers of incredible power, rule over a regressed society. Long-lived humans call upon the spirits, the children of these gods, for fantastical spells to help them live in this dangerous world. Alden was born in a distant land to serve the gods. He rebelled against them but suffered great loss. When he discovers a plot to centralize the gods’ power in one nation, Alden must travel with the sprite Angel and a former enemy to search through San Teresa for clues to his sister’s whereabouts. She is the only person he knows able to petition the gods directly. With the most powerful figures on the planet in his way, it’s a race against time to find his sister before the gods lose their power to mortal men. So why are the elite of San Teresa pretending his sister never existed to begin with?
  • “Kill All Spiders” – Military Fantasy – KNOWN AS THE EXTERMINATOR, a former soldier has taken as his mission in life to murder every spider he finds. These demonspawn spiders worked as war animals for the Orcs. However, in the ashes of the Second Orc War, the giant spiders escape into the countryside of Meridia. The Exterminator is hired by the Imperial Army to perform his specialty, eradicating the demons from every cave and forest he can find them in.

And that’s all I have right now. I’m especially partial to Kill All Spiders since I absolutely hate real spiders, and giant demon spiders are something I’d love to kill in a fantasy setting. I’m debating whether it should be “Kill All Spiders – Book I, [Book Name]” but I’m not sure.

Both books should be done by the end of summer, with Shadow of the Machine Gods slated for release by Summer, if I can get it written and edited by then. There’s also the cover, but I think I’ll be okay there.

On a personal note, our dryer caught fire so we had to evacuate our house. Everyone is okay and the house still stands, but it smells of smoke throughout. My office is the worse for the smoke smell, since it was poorly ventilated and is full of dusty books.

I’m glad we’re okay though.

How to Write a Character’s Value Proposition

According to psychologists there’s two main value systems for people: ethical systems and ideological systems.

When you approach a character, you may have some general idea of what they’re looking to do in the story. But what do they value? In this article I hope to dissect “letter of the law” vs. “spirit of the law” and basic value propositions. Hopefully this will help you formulate your own characters’ value propositions and how they can clash with people who have different values.

Let’s look at a few characters and their values:

1. Batman/Bruce Wayne – “It’s Wrong to Kill”

In terms of value systems, a reader can make an easy judgement on what someone values if they have a code that they stick to. This can be something blatantly said in the story, like Batman’s code to not kill, or something more subtle, like his aversion to using firearms. He values nonlethal force and actually looks down on those who use lethal force as taking the easy way out.

However, he’s obviously committing a crime by acting as a vigilante and assaulting people. So he clearly sees some crimes as true violations and others as not so true violations. This means he isn’t acting in the “letter of the law”, he’s got a more vague idea of right and wrong that he’s personally using as his metric for justice.

A good way to frame a value is to use an “it’s wrong…” sentence. In this case, Batman would say “it’s wrong to kill”, “it’s wrong to steal”, and “it’s wrong to hurt the innocent”. Notice the inclusion of “innocent” in the last one. It’s perfectly fine for Batman to hurt villains or criminals, but not those that don’t deserve it.

Let’s try another person…

2. Judge Dredd – “It’s Wrong to Violate the Law”

As far as “letter of the law” goes, it’s usually used by people to describe characters who stick to the law exactly as it’s written. There can be no bending the rules here. Judge Dredd is a perfect example.

So let’s say Judge Dredd’s value proposition is “it’s wrong to violate the law”. Now what’s permissible? Well essentially anything as long as you are operating within the law. Dredd can kill, maim, hurt, or detain anyone who violates the law within a set framework. Because his value system is aligned with the law he has the benefit of falling back on actual codified rules, there’s no vagaries here since the law stays the same.

He isn’t like Batman, who believes killing is wrong. He’s perfectly fine killing as long as it’s someone who has violated the law to such a degree to warrant it.

Let’s try another character. One not as nice, or human, as these others…

3. Lucifer (from Lucifer) – “It’s Wrong to Lie”

Lucifer is a show that was originally cancelled on a television network and picked up by Netflix. It’s based on the comic of the same name, though the show takes liberties with the story quite a bit.

Now Lucifer is supposed to be the character from the Bible, the serpent of old and the devil. He’s described here as an angel fallen from grace and cast out of Heaven. However, the show goes out of its way to explain that he isn’t “all bad”. He’s not a liar, despite being the father of lies. Lucifer will never outright lie, though he will kill, torture, hurt, or detain people.

His value proposition is therefore “it’s wrong to lie”. Simply because of his nature in the show, he’s leaned heavily on that specific value to show some worth to others. When another character shows up to impersonate him, when the character lies it reveals he isn’t the same person. This is a useful tool for a writer because it can show the tension or clash of values between two people. Someone like a spy would be willing to lie constantly to complete a mission. Lucifer, however, would be a terrible spy.

Conclusion

Values are important for a character. When working on your characters, consider what their main value judgment is. What do they think is wrong? For extra credit you can explore why they think it’s wrong. Story elements can put this value proposition to the test, similar to Misha Burnett’s Five Pillars idea.


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Don’t Force a Pantser to be a Plotter

If the title of this article is confusing to you, I recommend an article by The Write Practice on the difference between “pantsers” and “plotters”. That being said, the genesis of today’s writing post is from my own research and revelation. I mentioned it briefly on Twitter.

I’ve been writing for some time. Back in Middle School (age 11-13) I had an idea for a children’s fantasy book I never finished. The story was partly allegorical and filled with dream logic. It was incredibly fantastical and even now when I revisit my ideas from back then I feel a sense of wonder from the words I wrote as a child.

In revisiting some of the work I wrote later, maybe during my early college years, I saw that same sense of wonder and earnestness towards writing. I regret that I seemingly lost that spark.

So what happened?

You’ve read the title. You should know by now.

The revelation struck me like a slap to the face. I should have known better.

I am, in my heart of hearts, a “pantser”. My stories flow better and characters grow better when I don’t have every detail meticulously planned out ahead of time. I have ideas, sure, and I even make a general outline, but when I let the characters tell me their story my writing works better.

Story advice tends to come from the “plotters” though, because “pantsers” can’t easily express what it is that they do. So in researching writing, I was taking advice that didn’t work for me. I was planning out every detail, every minutia, that would hamper my personal writing style.

There are three takeaways from this:

  1. Check Your Old Writing – I mentioned this before in my post titled How to Tell If Your Writing Is Improving. It’s extremely important to read what you’ve written in the past and glean from those stories any changes between then and now. In my case, I realized my stories have become sterile and lacked heart.
  2. Everyone is Different – Easy to say, I know, but there’s a truth here. I shouldn’t have been trying to force a square peg in a round hole. I’m a pantser, and should have written as one. Figure out your style of writing and do it the way that works best for you.
  3. Take What Lessons You Can – Yes, I said that taking plotter advice was difficult for me, but it doesn’t mean it’s all a bad fit. The structure of stories, character changes, foreshadowing… these are all things I found useful to learn about. Find something that catches your eye and if it doesn’t work for you (see #2) then try something else.

Well, I hope that helps you with your writing. It helped me realize my difficulties so I hope to pass it on.

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Writing so Your Work Reads Better

One of the most interesting things to me is when people say that they write for themselves. I get that, I love writing. But it’s not just for me.

If you’re submitting your work, it isn’t about you. It’s about the person reading it. If it’s about them, then your focus should be on getting your work to a point where it can be read.

So the question is: How do you write so you can be read easily? I offer three simple solutions to improve your writing towards that point:

1. Read your work out loud

Please, please, please read it out loud. Repetition and odd words are easily caught with this method. Someone once told me it’s the first editor you’ll ever have. So please, try it.

2. Use “said” more often than not

I’ve heard this a ton of times, but never understood until I started reading my own work. “Said” is easily ignored, but unique and uncommon attestations are difficult to ignore. Readers typically want to ignore what isn’t being spoken by characters, so doing this allows your story to be read easier.

3. Try to avoid “to be” verbs

The big one is “to be” verbs. What sounds better:

“He was under the apple tree.” vs. “He stood under the apple tree.”

Obviously both are… fairly neutral. But “was” is weak and tells you nothing about what he’s DOING under the apple tree. “Stood” tells you he’s on his feet, at least.

Now this applies to us because “was” and “is” just comes across as boring to readers. If your entire paragraph contained descriptions involving “was” it becomes repetitive. Then, instead of just ignoring the attestation, the reader now ignores the descriptions and gets lost. Or worse, the reader gets bored.

This is all conventional advice, but if you’re writing for your work to be read (and I hope you are) then it is important to take this to heart.


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Pitfalls of Writing Politics in Fiction

Fiction can often deal with governments, but the biggest issue I’ve noticed is that governments are too often conflated with politics.

I previously reviewed Freehold, and it’s a perfect example of a political bend taken to an extreme in your writing. Freehold is a science fiction book about the titular libertarian colony that functioned perfectly well until refugees started migrating en masse. You can already see where the author’s political leanings favor.

But see, that didn’t have to be the case. In this case, the author framed the book as a way to convey his political opinion instead of using his political opinion as a background for an actually powerful story.

If your message is more important than plot or character your book will ring hollow. Readers don’t like being preached to, even if they agree with you.

So I offer you these three ways to put politics/government in your story without falling for the trap of messaging.

1. Show a political system you don’t like as functioning well

If you don’t agree with a monarchy then try to include one as a functioning government in a story. If you can do that, then you can provide a message with your heroes to say “I don’t like monarchies”, while still showing that they do function.

Obviously, monarchy is just an example, but this idea applies to other political systems and opinions. If you hate communism, try to portray it as a functioning society in your story.

2. Show other opinions as being valid outside the main characters

Some people won’t agree with you, and that’s fine. Only showing your political opinion as being the “right one” will lead to half, if not more, of your readers being annoyed. The easiest way to show this is by showing the political idea operating as #1 mentioned, but you can simply just have the opinions spoken of by other characters (not necessarily held to by a main character, though… that’s #3).

A good example of this is when an opinion is shown on news reports as being discussed. No one is particularly “wrong”, but the discussion takes place nonetheless.

Still put your opinion in there! It’s fine, but acknowledge that people disagree with you and that it’s valid.

Be careful, though, of being a “middle of the road” person. Bigotry or racism shouldn’t be acknowledged as valid political opinions, but a character who holds those opinions can still be a friend to the protagonist. I’ll leave it to you how to handle issues like that, but political issues themselves are something that should be open to discussion.

3. Show a main character as having the opinions you disagree with

This is an offshoot of what I mentioned previously. Instead of the opinion coming from a third party you could have a main character share an opinion you don’t agree with. Even if your main character is a die-hard libertarian, the communist friend they have will keep them in check and they’ll playfully joke about their differences. It is entirely possible to have this without it becoming a mechanism that the reader sees as “preaching”.

Now the reason I split this out is because this isn’t for everyone. Sometimes the beliefs that oppose yours disgust you, and that’s fine. If you don’t want to work on a story where one of the main characters believes a politic opinion you don’t agree with, that’s perfectly fine.

Conclusion

Ultimately, to avoid the pitfalls of writing political fiction, you simply have to avoid becoming a mouthpiece for your particular politics. Oh, sure, you can certainly preach. But once you’ve done that readers who disagree with you will be gone.

“I didn’t want them anyways,” you may say. But is it worth losing readers because you prefer a flat tax? Or because you think term limits in the senate are a good idea? These are the kinds of things I’m talking about, not moral issues.

Remember to keep writing!


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